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Hi, I'm V. It's not my real name - not even close - but I'm Vigilo here, and I've been other V-beginning pretentious Latin usernames elsewhere on the internet for around six years now, so V works!

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Writers of the Revolution, March

Tue Mar 31, 2015, 2:10 PM


featured WRITER


nawkaman

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I've mentioned it before, but I adore the feeling of finding a new writer's gallery and then immediately being able to share that writer's works with a lot of people. It's why I've slyly, cleverly commandeered this entire monthly feature all for myself. I get to read wonderful literature and show off all the wonderful literature I've read, what's not to love?

This month's source of wonderful literature is nawkaman, who writes really gorgeous poetry. Better still, he seems to always be trying something different, which not only makes for an interesting gallery, but also has end-results that are rather brilliant. So, here lies beautiful poetry. Go forth and read it, it's completely deserving of your time and your attention! 

we burn stubborn oil, old as stonesam I transcending, am I trending
toward the scorched west
to the literal you, to the going guilt
this excess weight I've carried, my wild-haired suffragette
I've come near and nearly dear
and you are still patient, re-counting your dimensions
measuring flaws in the fabric I have written
lacing them in lingered notes
for me to flutter by unyielding, unchanged


we burn stubborn oil, old as stones.

to the literal you, to the going guilt

this excess weight I've carried, my wild-haired suffragette
I've come near and nearly dear
It just sounds so good! This is a lovely poem - it doesn't let you stop reading it once you start, but carries you onwards until you finish, in a whirl of cleverly done alliteration and internal rhyming.


for frost: we need not live in vigilwe don't have to split a fork
in two (or ten or six); may then diverge
our Paths along the path
not finite, un-impossible? you
may have rule and road, miles and
morass,
sir. the Hoarfrost gathers great
on you, like winter on the words
you forged from wood and wakeful spurs
(unsleeping, temporal
remainders); like ornaments
that decorate dull
in any other season.
you are boxed and labeled, kept
in the murky & foreclosed adjunct space
that borders the heart but never enters
a tease of a tease to touch
the lives of those who happen by
your 'verse.
i've left minds more open and
know travels- even in the way
everyone travels- that will carry me
for miles until i sleep.

for frost: we need not live in vigil.

i've left minds more open and
know travels- even in the way
everyone travels- that will carry me
Do you like E. E. Cummings? I adore E. E. Cummings. I've written half a paper on E. E. Cummings. I also like Robert Frost. This poem has E. E. Cummings vs Robert Frost and it is every bit as amazing as I've made it out to be. Go, read!


past still lingersthe crow speaks once to the wicked
plucking yellowmilk eyes, one-string revivals
to an old count of sins
and yesterday visions of pacific rush
folding over the coast like a blanket of stars
and the water remembers

past still lingers.

and yesterday visions of pacific rush
folding over the coast like a blanket of stars
I'm also a fan of short poems, and this poem manages to pack in a lot of rich and heavily textured imagery in six lines alone. It's a wonderful example of how atmospheric and appealing brevity can be, and a lovely read altogether. 


i hear knives in the windsomething in the timbre, tall       heat,
sugar licking palm fronds        fat cats
sweltering sundays.
wash the salt; wash the afterburn    it
isn't
            like we planned       you never
say the words        plain, only      
                                                   mm        
mm if we ever      could we maybe stay
we always tried but couldn't        shake
the open space  we make   the world a-
nother shape     as we stand among the
timbertall       sugar licking palm fronds
fall.
                                   til heat escapes.

i hear knives in the wind.

                                                   mm        

mm if we ever      could we maybe stay
Firstly, this poem has a gorgeous title, and I love poems with gorgeous titles, because they so often lead to gorgeous poems. This poem didn't disappoint. The variety of techniques and the deftness with which nawkaman uses them here creates an incredibly compelling poem that is definitely worth your time and attention.

We :heart: nawkaman.

featured CRITIQUES


IOwnSarcasm


on Apostasy by moondrums.

[...] it's already a very harsh, heavy word in a poem made powerful by soft and understated ones, and with the extra emphasis from the line break it reads unevenly, choppily. I really like the imagery of the lamb and the wine, but it would sound better and more cohesive with the rest of the poem with a different word, or a different enjambment.

read the full critique here.


MoonshineChild

on Countdown by NoOtherKing.

Some of the narrator's thoughts could be reworded. For example, you repeat "time" in phrases that I felt it was unnecessary in: "Each beat hammers against my ribs from the inside, pounding time against my bones." "I am slow, too slow, bogged down by the weight of time." Its use sounds awkward here.

read the full critique here.


featured RESOURCES


In addition to these resources, we're publishing articles with interviews from other writers in deviantART for our Mentorship Project, so check those out! So far, we have: On Writing, On Poetry and Prose Basics, To Rhyme Or Not To Rhyme?, Description and Vocabulary, and Vocabulary, Narrative Voice, and POV!

30 Days of Poetry: NaPoWriMo 2015





How to Develop Story Conflict


 

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nawkaman Featured By Owner 10 hours ago
Thank you for the fave! :heart:
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IrrevocableFate Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015   Writer
:tighthug: ILY
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Tag a quality deviant: You’re it! Quality doesn’t mean that you have a lot of followers, or a lot of messages. It means that you’re nice to other people, and you deserve to be happy. If you get this message, someone is telling you that they love you as you are, and they don’t care how much followers you have. Send this to 10 deviants who deserve it. If you break the chain, nothing will happen. But it’s just good to let someone know that you love them! Heart
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Solarune Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2014   Writer
TWO DAYS! :iconlachoirplz:
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Solarune Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2014   Writer
8 DAYS :la: 
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
V, that feature is absolutely ridiculous. I'm going to be smiling for days on end. 

Thank you so, so much.
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chsehd41 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2014
The winter winds blow and we shall have snow
And what will the robin do then, poor thing.
He'll sit in the barn to keep himself warm
And tuck his head under his wing, poor thing.
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Solarune Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2014   Writer
I am so sorry for the lateness, but HAPPY BIRTHDAY! I hope it was wonderful and full of sunshine and nice things. :tighthug: I hope you're enjoying London, and that all is perfect in your life. :heart:
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AriTheNorseman Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014
Far from home, time zone-
ing across the sea, new home;
happy birthday, you.


Welcome to London! Enjoy the rain~ :cake::heart:
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VFreie Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014
Happy slightly late birthday! c:
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pazlowq Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014   Traditional Artist
Happy Birthday!
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IrrevocableFate Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014   Writer
Happy Birthday, Ilo-bear. <3
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2014   Writer
Happy Birthday!!! :cake:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Edited Sep 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconcakeplz:  (advance) happy birthday! have fun. :party:
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2014   General Artist
Thanks for featuring me at Written Revolution! Every comment was really thoughtful, it was lovely to read =)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014   Writer
Thanks for the :+devwatch:
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2014
comment here for you, miss.
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VFreie Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2014
Hi! This is right out of the blue, but I just thought this upcoming comics anthology might be of interest to you: teamparvelo.com/lepakkoluola/e…
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014
It's been a breath of fresh air to see you around again, V. You know we missed you more than any of us - even those that are writers! - can put words to, right?

Anyways, you favorited a piece of my writing, and seeing a favorite from you always makes my day. Actually, just seeing anything from you makes my day, but don't let the diminish my appreciation stemming from the fact that you actually took the time to read a piece from me. ;p

All the :heart:s, V.
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner May 26, 2014  Professional Writer
You've been featured on my blog:la: Come check it out if you'd like. :heart:
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HtBlack Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
PS SOUND NEEDS TO BE TURNED ON.
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HtBlack Featured By Owner May 12, 2014
Thank you SO much for the points! :hug:

Also random link: www.omfgdogs.com/ .
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Professional Writer
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Darling, I was looking for that lovely poem you wrote based on Federico Garcia Lorca's poem about green. Can you point me in the right direction? Or possibly remind me what the form is called? I'm thinking of writing something like it :)
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2013
Thank you, love. :coffeecup:
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